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andwebreathe
11.18.03 at 6:31 p.m.


AND WE BREATHE;___________________________(((but we don't feel))) v. Faded/stars
andwebreathe

Content: You don't really write in a plain format about what's going on, but have a certain poetic license. Hm, I rather like it. You're a beautiful writer, I admit to that freely, but I don't like the endings of a lot of your entries. Sometimes, I'd read an entry and just think Oh, wow, that's a really good ending, except it wouldn't really be the ending. I think this entry isn't too bad of an example. You reach a point in your entry where it would just make an excellent ending, but, instead, you keep going. I think you would be a terrific writer if you developed your writing skills a bit. {28/30}

Design: I'm actually somewhat disappointed with this design. I like the quote "And We Breathe" and the way everything's arranged (especially the links and short description/time and date), but, well, it's a star. That's it, just a star. I don't know, maybe it holds some significance to you, but, frankly, I don't see it. I think your writing deserves something more profound than that. I also don't really like the color of the scrollbar; it would look better as just a solid pink. I give you props for making it yourself, though. {22/30}

Update: It seems you update by the hour... and you actually, sort of, do. Wow, I think I should actually take a point off for this because you've got to have a limit. {9/10}

Navigation: As previously stated, I like the arrangement of the links. {5/5}

Errors: None that I could find. {5/5}

Contact: E-mail, notes, AIM. {5/5}

Bonus: Let's just say you had a lot of links to check for errors. {15/15}

Total: 89/100

Favorite Quote: "And it's more of wanting to be touched than fear that makes us wrap ourselves around one another."

Comments: I like your Oneword entries; you do a really good job with those.

Reviewed by Yelena.

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